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...the green sashed servants....
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Annoyed?
Ya me too. Why in the hell do some otherwise enjoyable authors feel the need to to repeat the same information dozens of times in a relatively short span of time? I was reading a reasonable first novel put out by one of the major houses that had a character describe the group of people who did the manual labor in the building he was in, in the exact same way at least a dozen times in three or four chapters. I'm pretty certain that this was done every time they were mentioned. Why? Your guess is as good as mine. I'm not done with the book, or even sure I'll finish it but I didn't pick up any of the authors under-subtle hints that these people would be important to the story.
What a waste of verbiage, time and glaringly jarring.
...the green sashed servants....
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...the green sashed servants....
...the green sashed servants....
Annoyed?
Ya me too. Why in the hell do some otherwise enjoyable authors feel the need to to repeat the same information dozens of times in a relatively short span of time? I was reading a reasonable first novel put out by one of the major houses that had a character describe the group of people who did the manual labor in the building he was in, in the exact same way at least a dozen times in three or four chapters. I'm pretty certain that this was done every time they were mentioned. Why? Your guess is as good as mine. I'm not done with the book, or even sure I'll finish it but I didn't pick up any of the authors under-subtle hints that these people would be important to the story.
What a waste of verbiage, time and glaringly jarring.
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But "The green sashed servants" is just such an ugly phrase in and of itself, one wonders why he would just keep using it over and over again.
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green-sashed servants
;)
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green, sashed servants
:D
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And I'm wondering what weird kind of combinations were involved, were they actually human, and why was someone slashing them.
Okay, so I'm weird.
Kate
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G, d & r
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Are you writing that one, Mike?? I would read it in a heartbeat, and rec it allllll over!!!!!
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Sorry, I'm sure you would buy I'm not so you can't.
That story's not mine and I'm not letting it stick to me.
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You know you want to. It's taking over your brain even as we speak. Mean 'n Green and Lean 'n Green together? Separated by the US Army and the Code of Decency?? On the lam from an enraged Miss Piggy????
You know you want to.
*eeeeevil smile*
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I do _not_ commit fanfic.
If I did, itd be something _I'd_ enjoy like Storm/Elie Quinn.
;-p
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Dare you? A double-dog-dare? I'll write one and you write the other.
Pick which, and let's set a time limit. Say: No more than a thousand words, no less than a hundred.
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Wedge
shaped
head....
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